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    dots Submission Name: i'm sorrydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 920



    Description:
       i was high when i wrote this too. also very in love bi chicks rule!!!


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    dotsi'm sorrydots
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    chained to the bed,
    lies the girl of my dreams.
    i told her the story,
    of what love really means.

    the clamps on her body.
    i'm whiopping her clit.
    the wax on the bottle.
    the candle is lit.

    this torture i give,
    this vengenceance i seek.
    run hands through her hair,
    so soft and so sleek.

    her tears streaming down,
    her make-up has smeared.
    with the mask off,
    her pain is too clear.

    i'm sorry my angel,
    i didn't mean this.
    regret in my mind,
    is thrown out with a hiss.

    guilt turns to fury.
    i'm at it again.
    i'm sorry my love.
    i'm sorry my friend.

    you shouldn't have hurt me.
    you shouldn't have lied.
    i'm out of control.
    i'm sorry, i tried.




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 16:16:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I like this one, this could be a good metal song, excellent work. I almost can hear a music, and voice. A relly good job, what else I can say, keep on with a good work
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Ceca | [ Reply to This ]
      what can't i say?

    the ending was great / the peice itself was great

    as for personal reflection i know what you "mean"

    janus
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      This seemed like a personal piece - or a sadomasochistic (sp?) piece. The flow and format are good - we all write and express in our own way & this was unique
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this! Hey, I think it's cool, stuff, like that, lmao, call me weird whatever. So, do you really do this stuff? It wouldn't matter to me, I guess I'm demented. Anyway, I liked this, it was very well written, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      do you seriously do this to people? There has to be something underthis to make this happen. i am really not sure what all this means I have to be honest.
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by aprilrenee101 | [ Reply to This ]


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