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    dots Submission Name: I know this much is truedots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI know this much is truedots
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    I hold on tight, I know I can let go, you'll catch me when I fall. When Im cut deep down, blood splattered on the white wall , I know you'll be the stiches that hold me together. When Im choking back on tears, facing my fears, I know your the one that's wipping the warm tears away, hold my hand telling me its alright. I know its, you here with me. I know this much is true, Adam I love you.




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 16:25:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah i can fell the flow, i think it should be a poem and knowing u u mean this im happy that u are happy and that u have stong feelings for him. knowing this there is not one tiny lie there and i think u guys will be together for a longf time or forever, yeah but its great! there was a few things that i have to read a cupple times but after that i understood those few tinny things but there was not a hole lot of things like that. ur ausome love ya,
    liam!
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
      Really sweet thouh a tad morbid. I think that you should put this more as a poem as it seems to flow just like one but it's up to you ^_^
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats seriously sweet. It's great that he's there for you in those ways:) very nice job:) I love the line about the cut and him being your stitches:)
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats so sweet. Its great to be able to depend on someone. I like your poem a lot, it shows emotion. ..my brothers name is adam. lol. But whatever. Good job
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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