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    dots Submission Name: Stubborndots

    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Sadness hidden behind defiant eyes
    No on can see the pain.
    Razorblade edges
    Help keep prying eyes away.
    An invisible box
    Locks away secrets deep inside
    And with a smile and a laugh,
    No on can see everything's not right.

    She tries to keep her cool,
    and let things roll by,
    She deals with everything as it comes,
    Not a lot of questions as to why.
    Just tries to let it all pass over her,
    Smother her,
    Drown her,
    Suffocate her,
    And with her last dying breath,
    She'll argue everything's fine.

    Submitted on 2006-02-01 16:32:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved your poem! Locks away secrets deep inside, and with a smile and a laugh. Reminds me of me sometimes, when I just fake smile and all that. Its a great poem. Whoo!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooofffff, my comment wont be half a good as ur poem!
    i loved it!
    that defensive and the denial vibes going on! i especially liked the lines
    "Razorblade edges
    Help keep prying eyes away."
    very profound!
    keep on digging!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]

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