Description: This is a very breif poem that I wrote for one certain person. I was in the car going to go pick up my new pair of glasses, doing a lot of thinking about everything that has been going on in my life and all the feelings I've been having. One person kept coming into my mind and then, closely followed by the thought of him, this poem came and I wrote it down in a mess of scrawling messy handwriting on a bit of napkin with a mostly dead pen that I kept having to shake and try other tricks to get it to work so I could get this down on paper.
Follow your path; I'm here -------------------------------------------
Thought may lead you
Fret not about
The path your dreams choose.
For whichever direction
Life may take you
Here with you
I'll forever remain
Even if love should leave,
Take you away from me
Faithfully by your memory
I'll forever stay.
I really liked it. I know exactly what you were feeling when you wrote this. Love is a hard thing to deal with, even when things are going okay, because you know, in the back of your mind, that someday they may not.
I've been under a lot of stress lately, over this girl, but I realized that I don't need her. I don't need her to be happy. The days that I don't think about her are fantastic. My stomach feels great, and except for my skin starting to break out, I'm perfect. I've found somebody, who you may know, that I think I could spend the rest of my life with. :)
The piece is very short, but I think, sometimes, that's okay. Good work Ana, I'm looking forward to reading more.
The loyalty behind this was admirable, but the theme as a poem, I felt, needed more. Maybe if you expand each thought as to how he would travel far (to study/work..) when he returned, you'd be there. And remove the full stop in verse one.