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    dots Submission Name: existencedots
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    Author: dublhelix
    ASL Info:    18/m/perth australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 43/36/15
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 168
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    Description:
       huh god knows. i know it goes on a bit. just a bit of my thoughts, on a dark night.


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    dotsexistencedots
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    i think therefore i am.

    I walk along the path and be,
    existing, as the fateful seed
    that grows to flower fruit of gold.
    growing up. growing old.
    feeble, dead. growing cold.
    This is all there is for life?
    eternal trouble, ceaseless strife?
    i walk the lonely road alone.
    my thoughts are those i must atone.

    I think, therefore i might not be.

    What evidence is there of this?
    the feeling of that final kiss,
    residing in the front of mind.
    once forbidding,
    never blind.
    but leads to thoughts of existance hence.
    so thus i sit upon the fence,
    and ponder on the fact of thought.
    "my brain creates its sullen worlds,
    its holy see, its writ of right,
    creating day and gloomy night,"
    what is to say that truth is truth?

    i think, therefore i am not.




    Submitted on 2006-02-01 18:34:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      descartes much? anyway, nice progression on that classic line, interesting choice of words in there too.

    some were predictable, slightly cliché, some were surprisingly refreshing and original.

    "its holy see, its writ of right," particularly.

    and very good work there for getting hyproglo to start one of his own.

    peace.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a tragic poem
    Of a soul feeling so alone
    A soul that looks not to the sky
    For the answer to the question "why?"
    But rather casts its eyes to the ground
    Walks along, neglecting all sounds
    For when this soul looks up to see
    Its eyes only focus on the atrocity
    So a head held low this soul doth carry
    For that its path will never be merry
    Eternal sorrow its steps will be
    It must look up before it hits a tree

    Sorry, I just got into the flow of your write with my comment.
    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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