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    dots Submission Name: It'll be okaydots
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    Author: inkpen
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 391/199/61
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Misc/Friendship
    Total Views: 1208
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1123



    Description:
       Alright, I know its not the best of the best but I felt like i needed to get it out, its not talking about a guy or anything, its to my twin sister

    No matter how much I dislike her I'll always love her
    Tell me any spelling errors, Its not really suppose to rhyme but it might at some parts


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    dotsIt'll be okaydots
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    I lay in the tub
    Then I hear you cryin'
    I slowly set my book down
    And I find you there
    Underneath your covers
    Hiding from the world
    I whisper. "It'll be okay"
    Because it will

    When you feel lonely in a crowd full of people
    And theres no one there
    No one to turn to
    It'll be okay

    When your eyes are dry
    And you've just got done crying
    Then your starting up again
    It'll be okay

    When nothing seems right
    And your having a bad day
    And nothing can get better
    It'll be okay

    In the middle of the night
    When you wake up
    And your scared
    It'll be okay

    No matter how many times
    They say we'll understand someday
    I know we wont
    It'll only just be okay

    Cause' I'm right here
    And we'll always have each other
    I'm telling you this right now
    It'll be okay

    It'll all be okay




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love all your stanzas in your poems. They are short and to the point, yet they each describe a different part of the emotion. And being able to comfort someone is a great power. Don't lose it!
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by Darkstar9500 | [ Reply to This ]
      they were right,it really hits home,and if it is ok with you im gonna copy this for one of my friends becuse this is exactly what i have been trying to tell her for the last 3 months that she has been in mourning for her parents.Bty,i teared up too,and i really,REALLY like this poem,in fact,i think the only one of youres that i like better is She Seems.
    Texan_Poet
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, it's so simple... but totally have that stabbing feeling in my heart... where u know that tears are building up, it's so sweet, the words it'll be ok, they're so loving and comforting, like when u feel like your world is ending... when some one you love says it'll be ok... everything seems to get better instantly coz u know that they are there for u and that they love u nomatter what. this poem is magical.
    it's a really good write, don't be so quick to put it down, theres alot of feeling in it and i like it alot.

    i don't think ive read any of your other writes before but i might have to start.

    xox thoughts
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      I swear to God...i teared up...this really hits home. I mean, the fact that i know you personally and everything...and that everyone's all depressed right now.

    I really really really like this one. It's my favorite by you. (and she seems)

    I didn't see anything wrong with it...no spelling errors or anything...

    *darkwinged*
    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]


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