This was truly amazing the imagery you created was fab, no need to make it longer as you've said everything you needed to. Great piece, i like the fact of giving yourself mourning time 'I told myself that when it was gone I had to be over you' Truly great John x
first off, i love the simplicity (by that, i mean, very crisp and clear and not bogged down by anything other than what you needed) and blatant phrases. It just comes out so clear and precise. (I hope this came out right)
and, personally, i didn't care for the gray nail polish part until i got to the end. Wiping away the memory with acitone...that bit solidified the first part for me. brought it back. I am still on the fence about "..." being your only grammar, but that is another personal thing. i would have loved it without the pause. but it really doesn't affect the poem at all for me, just a visual thing i sometimes have.
I loved the part about the nailpolish linking to the memory of the person this is about, and i love how you call yourself Nevada girl. I think you should make it longer though, go into detail more. Nice job though:)
I love this poem! how you used the nail polish to signify the memory and how it left you. Word usage was great too, "strangle" and "one finger at a time". Really good poem. (much better than the crap they usually have on this site)