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    dots Submission Name: Talking Blue into Tearsdots
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    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTalking Blue into Tearsdots
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    I drew a black heart
    Not in permanence
    But to see if I remembered
    The overused symbol
    So sharp
    It scrapes every meaning of feeling
    Into teardrops
    Hardened from regretted love
    Hanging by metal pins,
    pierced through my lips
    Soon to melt and fall
    And be submerged in black hair
    Black heart
    Black pen
    Tight black jeans
    So tight it almost hurts the empty spaces
    Where time and existence
    Slowly eat away
    At the things I used to cling to

    My pinned confidence
    Is cut with the needle
    Slit through the sleeve
    Across my heart
    And from within my eyes
    I bleed.
    Red and pink scars
    Crisscrossed xs that talk blue into tears
    Im just a drawing
    A poor caricature
    For misery and self-hate

    Its so appropriate
    Because its what ive always recognized
    Discomfort and sadness
    And so finally
    My eyes have tired of lying
    And at this moment
    Have become blinded
    Refusing to depict
    Even the lowliest of images
    Yet everyone can see it now
    My scarlet eyes
    My disease that caught fire
    Alighting on abandonment
    And the worthlessness
    Sitting like dry kindle wood
    Within my pitted stomach

    And alone I sit
    Again and again alone
    With a monster sitting
    Beside and within me
    Because she told me to face it
    But first I should rid myself of the steal trap
    Circumstance has always had me in
    Ill scratch out my eyes
    And hold my breath until darkness
    Envelops every aspect of me
    But the windows to my soul, she said
    Have never been so clear




    Submitted on 2006-02-02 16:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sweet.. now this im liking.. got bored, and wanted to read something with feeling even if the feeling was self-deprication or pity or whatever. and although i wasnt quite all over your other poem i knew your [censored] would be interesting.. but this was kickass. i love the comparison to caricature..
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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