Dying on the Inside -------------------------------------------
What is this pain i'm feeling
All the remorse is killing me
Why do I continue bleeding
I thought we were meant to be
What is this silence
A love in the frost
What is this distance
The light of your eyes
Lost
***Tears come screaming
Down my face
Your thorns caress
My cold flesh
Dying inside
What is left of me
A few empty promises
A shell forgotten
The tone of your voice
Cuts me to the bone
Left with no choice
But to cry alone
All that falls around
My walls are coming down
***
You try to fill the void
With all that poison
Drowning in regret
Choking on life
I breathe my last
another very well written piece.. the emotion drips through with every line... broken and left to deal with the empiness.. mmmmm what a story protrayed here..
This was pretty cool, but it seems unfinished the way you left it like that. and i didn't get what the stars were for. the poem itself rocked. Nice job:)
That was an incredible write. I would totally love to hear that played as song, i bet it would be awesome. Overall it was written very well and shows a great amount of emotion, the sadness, the pain, its all there plain to see. Good job.
Submission Name: Dying on the Inside
