both crystal eyes focus
First the Phoenix
lighted all darkness
Legends of people like myself
riding on golden winged horses
Exploding into the 3rd heavens
cascades of fine gold dust
Anointing my body with Joy
as I begin to speak in unknown tongues.
It sounds like you were filled with the holy ghost in this poem and brought closer to God, and therefore experienced a rebirth to a new spiritual person. That is what I gather from this. I might be wrong, but from some of the terms you used, I am led to believe my theory on this poem. Another beautifully written poem. I'm a fan of yours now.
Hey, Cheryl's back! Read this and thought it pretty good. You know back in olden days when they thought the Earth was the center of the universe, they thought the heavens were aligned in crystal spheres, one inside anothr. I mention that because that's what I thought of reading this. Anyway, I liked it a lot. the sense of being free came through clearly to me. One minor nit. You should say 'begin' in the last line to keep tense consistent. Other than that a fine write. Nice to have you back! :-)
Hooray - IT's Cheryl! This was beautiful and reminded me of a deep meditation or trance in tongues. Beautiful girl! I like all the visuals and goodness I get from this one! Nice to see you post! Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share tif
Your first line...very powerful, very stand alone... a lot of imagery in this and very nicely worded, the lines that really caught me, after the first one... "riding on golden winged horses Exploding into the 3rd heavens"
Hi Cheryl! This has me thinking of what ascending into heaven might be like for us mere mortals. What wonderful and captivating language you've used in this. It even starts out powerful > "Beautification disrobes"
"riding on golden winged horses with cascades of fine gold dust anointing our body"