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    dots Submission Name: REBIRTHdots

    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Beautification disrobes
    both crystal eyes focus
    First the Phoenix
    lighted all darkness
    Legends of people like myself
    riding on golden winged horses
    Exploding into the 3rd heavens
    cascades of fine gold dust
    Anointing my body with Joy
    as I begin to speak in unknown tongues.

    Submitted on 2006-02-02 18:01:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmmm, you really got your head into the mood for this one, Cheryl, and you've put some nice work into it with some lovely phrases.

    A simple story, yet I sense almost a Pandora's Box-like meaning within a meaning here, goodness and light - or Sodom and Gomorra?

    Very intriguing, and delicious to read. Well done

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds like you were filled with the holy ghost in this poem and brought closer to God, and therefore experienced a rebirth to a new spiritual person. That is what I gather from this. I might be wrong, but from some of the terms you used, I am led to believe my theory on this poem. Another beautifully written poem. I'm a fan of yours now.

    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Cheryl's back! Read this and thought it pretty good. You know back in olden days when they thought the Earth was the center of the universe, they thought the heavens were aligned in crystal spheres, one inside anothr. I mention that because that's what I thought of reading this. Anyway, I liked it a lot. the sense of being free came through clearly to me. One minor nit. You should say 'begin' in the last line to keep tense consistent. Other than that a fine write. Nice to have you back! :-)


    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hooray - IT's Cheryl!
    This was beautiful and reminded me of a deep meditation or trance in tongues. Beautiful girl! I like all the visuals and goodness I get from this one!
    Nice to see you post!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Your first line...very powerful, very stand alone...
    a lot of imagery in this and very nicely worded, the lines that really caught me, after the first one...
    "riding on golden winged horses
    Exploding into the 3rd heavens"

    Very nicely done
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah, that first line can be a stand alone write in itself!
    Such beauty in two words, but then again, you are the queen of haikus (bless u) and you have a knack for that!

    Such an enjoyable and uplifting write Cheryl! And a nice thing to smile at! Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Cheryl!
    This has me thinking of what ascending into heaven might be like for us mere mortals.
    What wonderful and captivating language you've used in this.
    It even starts out powerful > "Beautification disrobes"

    "riding on golden winged horses with cascades of fine gold dust anointing our body"

    A most enjoyable read and mind-image.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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