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Danger Danger

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
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Words: 175
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Danger Danger

What’s happening to the world today,
I remember not too long ago,
People would say
‘What’s pollution?’

Too much of this world has changed,
A clean environment for
A deadly sick earth we have exchanged,
Where is our sense?

Everything has gone plastic,
You’re in if you have it
It’s allegedly ‘fantastic’
Why are we doing this?

In the city there is nothing to be seen most nights
No stars, not one at all
All that can be seen is the city lights
How is this happening?

The people of today have for the earth no love
As children we were afraid of monsters,
We have become what we were afraid of
Still we continue?

Slowly time ticks away the years,
We kill this earth
Until all that is here disappears
Can it be stopped?

Have we no shame,
That we can progress,
And enflict such pain,
Is it to late?

Red light up ahead,
the results will come up later,
''Why does the country smell different?''

Submitted on 2006-02-02 19:32:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a great poem. I have been looking for a peice to use in my poetry class as an example of a romantic era poem, and I think I shall use this one. A few spelling errors, "inflict", ect. other than that, good timing.
Wishing for more
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  These are questions I've often asked ,myself.This is my idea of a great poetry.I love to ask questions sometimes in my poetry.Things certainly have changed haven't they?
| Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  I highly agree with Razorain,
if you change some of the words to make your sentances flow, then your in there! It is overall a good poem though, and you have a really good point, that is very clear to the reader, good work.
| Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Dark Muse | [ Reply to This ]
  Although it's a simple and concise poem, it has great meaning. All you need is to beautify your sentences, that way it'll express more of the author's feelings to the reader. Try it.
| Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Razorain | [ Reply to This ]

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