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    dots Submission Name: Desperationdots
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    Author: Seedofbayne
    ASL Info:    19/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 55/82/27
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 248
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    dotsDesperationdots
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    She's the girl i once adored
    she's all grown up
    now shes matured
    look at her go
    she can't be ignored

    I want her so
    others scream my name
    she turns her back
    as i run away

    she lights the candle
    my eternal flame
    broke the doors to my heart
    now im not the same

    living with out her is
    a 10 gauge to the face
    leaving blasphemy in
    its sugar coated space

    looking at the masses through her
    opaque, x-ray glasses
    she watched my heart beat
    out of place


    the sky is my limit
    so i am
    trying to capture
    the dying rapture




    Submitted on 2006-02-02 20:15:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      - I have no comment about the previous comment - BUT - This is more or less your best right yet - you keep an amazing rhythem up through the hole thing you have deep word choice that keeps the reader engulfed in your words and lets them a step into your mind Love you - keep it up love - xoox
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      well its kinda obvious this is about me, mike im still here but i mean i just went thru something wickd bad i mean i lost my bestfrend n everything so u cant blame me for seeming far away its cuz i dont wna deal with ne thing ne more
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]



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