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    dots Submission Name: unreality of my youthdots
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    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       This is about my best friend. We did everything together and went everywhere with each other. We almost never had a day where we didn't talk four different times on the phone about absalutely nothing and never went a weekend with out being at each other's house. But this year we barely talk. I got a boyfriend and now we are engaged. I'm 18 and still young. But I now have to be an adult and Miles is still a kid. Not that I'm not loving the excitment of getting ready to get married. But I never see her and we never hang out. She has another group of friends that have time for her and because I don't our friendship is hanging high. We will always be there when the other one needs someone. But right now it seems like we are far away. I miss her.


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    dotsunreality of my youthdots
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    Time is slipping I think
    It seems so long ago
    That I spent every spare moment
    with you
    we never went anywhere
    with out the other by our side
    inseparable we were
    but now
    apart
    I found someone to love me
    In a way I never thought
    I grew up faster
    I have responsibilities
    That you donít need to deal with yet
    Itís hard seeing you staying young and I
    growing slightly older
    on different plains
    it seems we canít connect
    itís so heart wrenching
    not to have you by me
    I call and your not home
    Your out or want to be alone
    You never call
    And Iím never there
    Where has time gone
    Has it slipped into the unreal?
    To the reality that is no longer?
    I knew this day would come
    Our lives making room for others
    And many changes
    But I didnít see it coming so soon
    My youth I fear is going fast
    But I hope I never lose spirit
    I wish you were here
    But your not
    Our lives have changed
    For the better I know
    But Iíll miss you
    I miss you already





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      I like the choppy, rawness of your writing. I believe you because of it. It seems authentic.

    So, two years have gone by since then, did you get married? How are things now?

    Cheers
    | Posted on 2008-08-25 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      I[m sorry to say this right off, but you really need defined sentences, I kept flowing them together, and had to re-read several of them.

    Aside from that, this was good. It felt like you were already reminiscent, rather than traumatized, I liked that. It wasn't a big, woe is me, but more like you were sincerely telling this to your friend, but almost hollow from the experience.

    I can't say I know your experience, but I think I can see things relatively clearly from your friend's perspective, although I can't say for certian, since I am not your friend. I can honestly say that she probably misses you as much as you miss her, or more, since she may feel abandoned, but also probably feels like an intruder when she's around. She probably feels like you are happy without her, and that she should leave you to your bliss.I know, I've hada few friendships strained by standing aside to support what I thought to be their happiness.

    I think that you should probably show this poem to your friend, or even better, just sit down and talk about it for a while. It's better to have it resolved one way or the other, rather than dragging out a dying farce of comradery. If the two of you are honest, your friendship will either strengthen, or die, but there won't be any more questions as to its state. I know that having a friendship end is painful, but having to live with the question of weather it is still there is harder by far.
    Salaam, and may you find your happy ending.
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Rastine Aristat | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, this often happens. the good thing is that you still want the friendship and want it to continue. Sometimes that isn't case we just let it die. But life tends to separate us. we go down our own paths. if this friendship mean a lot to you, you should really try to hook up. all the best.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by lilyfleur | [ Reply to This ]
      A strained friendship is always hard to mend and the ending of it hard to acpet. I think you laid yourself bare with your feelings and intent. It's up to your friend now. I would show her this poem. I've been the friend who moved on when one friend gets a man. She might feel she is inthe way, or uncomfortable if she is single. She may think you have changed. i'm not saying this is all your fault, but try to see where she could be coming from first. And maybe she outgrew your friendship and has not said so yet. You will never know, til you two sit and have a honest talk with the intent to not bash eachother. But state your needs from eachother. I hope all this works out for you. You wrote a very good poem.


    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I just went through this
    A great friend of mine
    But we went our seperate ways
    She isn't moving in a good direction
    and I'm getting new responcibilities and now when we see eachother I know it's just politeness that makes her smile at me and wave and I know it's just the fact that I love her that I return it.
    Great write.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, there is definitly emotion put into this. Personally, I thought you could've put a bit more into it, but it's still good.

    Time always gets the best of everyone of us... if there was only more of it. I've been in the same position as you, and I know how hard it is to watch someone grow away from you... become independent from you. It's hard to deal with.

    The sun always rises, so keep hanging on... things will look up sooner or later :) Good write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by disturbed420 | [ Reply to This ]


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