This was a very powerful write and I really enjoyed this one a lot. Not original at all, but that's only because a lot of people write about this [censored]. Anyway, I thought your poem was beautiful in a sadisticly dark way. Which is damn awesome, for those are the kind of poems I write. Keep up the great work.
WOW! This one just simply blew me away! I loved this, the emotion, the flow the imagery... They were all fitted together in this so well. Post some more, I am starting to get anxious evertime you don't post a new one. This was excellently written, and I hope that you come up with more like this one! GREAT WRITE. Alyssa
Excellent last stanza, I love the quote "Your beautiful wrists, Have the kiss of the rose." The last two lines on the first stanza could be improved, instead of saying "The plead" you could say "You plead" Overall excellent atmosphere this poem stirrs.
very dark and angsty... but I savour dark and angsty while some turn away from it.. The middle verse was my favorite..but I would change the first verse it is somehow less poetic then the rest...doesn't grab your attention enough from the start