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    dots Submission Name: Inbetween Thingsdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    You could see the hidden world
    if only you'd try.
    You'd know the greenness of your voice,
    the landscape of your favorite song,
    taste the colors in the blandest food.
    You'd be able to smell melancholy
    and know the one hundred kinds of drunkenness,
    for nothing is just one color,
    and few things are as beautiful
    as the colors between the rainbow's colors,
    and there are innumerable emotions
    between happiness and sadness.
    Nothing is pure,
    but if you could see what I do
    any desire for purity
    would be banished from your mind.




    Submitted on 2004-04-29 19:13:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it must be fun to see life this way! i only have gotten glimpses of it once in awhile. with me it is letters and phonemes. i figure that it is because i was an Acid Baby. (my mother did lsd when she was pregnant with me, changes the chromosomes, you know, and god-knows-what-all else!) reading poetry must be like a symphonic experience for you. you're so lucky!
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cool! "you'd be able to smell melancholy," what a great line! and i could totally imagine it. i wonder sometimes if it is us artistic, depressive types who tend to see and smell these "in betweens" because we are so very sensitive. and the 100 kinds of drunkenness, i'm sure there are a lot more because i've felt them all.... lol!! great write, dumplin! you have a very cool way of looking at life! i like it!
    | Posted on 2004-04-29 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your poem cause I like the things inbetween. I don't like purity cause real beauty must be imperfect. great poem. kind of dreamy. I like that.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree! Completely agree! I have always felt like that but have never really been able to express it outloud.. YOU have done so. Thank you. It was just one of those things that had I tried to give words to the idea, would have taken hours and 100 sheets of paper...

    You have such a marvelous way with colors....
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this finally something not about painting lol j/k..... you know i love your poems about paintings lol anywho..... i look @ life the same way, its great i always try to find the best in everything, and anyone who knows me, knows that its true, this is really good definatly one of my faves!
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say that purity of some things is cool. Like air, and water. Social purity: Really, really bad ideal. 100 kinds of drunkeness....punch, love, laugh, beer...I can't believe you know 96 more kinds of drunkeness than me yet you're only three years older. Just kidding of course.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]


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