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    dots Submission Name: Puppetdots
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    Author: LostInYerTears
    ASL Info:    14/F/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 85/86/32
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 185
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 381



    Description:
       Tis A Poem......Obviously
    i know it tis short but it twas ment to be


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

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    You have controll over me,
    I am a material possession only you can see,
    I've become a servant to yer words,
    I scream for help but my screams arnt heard,
    I have become locked in yer mind,
    For so long i've lost track of time,
    Just b/c my life belongs to you,
    Doesnt mean my heart and love do to......






    Submitted on 2006-02-03 15:06:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sounds like a rebellion is taking place among the servants. lol. this was brief, but it made a powerful point rest assure. I liked the imagery you used and the trapped feeling that is there to you say that last line. Very nicely written.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. It is hard to come up with a poem that I like and be short. The flow was lyrical and could be put to music if must be. All out great poem.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]
      Freakn CAR-A-Zeeeeeee!

    Heh, heh, heh...

    I stare into these words
    Words so often heard
    "How can I be a friend and a lover
    I choose you above all others"
    You take me to that point
    Lavished in the sins that you annoit
    Yet you are too much for me to see
    More than what I wanted you to be
    You have control
    Unto my soul"

    Sorry, just a musing comment on your write, right?

    Short and good...definately understood.

    *beeatch slapsez self and says...There ya go again!"
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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