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    dots Submission Name: A Feeling & You Said...dots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Hey,

    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. "You Said.." I wrote after my grandpa died.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven


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    dotsA Feeling & You Said...dots
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    A Feeling

    The empty feeling within your soul
    The waves crashing against the rocks
    The cool breeze surronding your soul
    The feeling of darkness closing in

    They are all but a feeling
    Too complicated to feel or explain
    That would mean the world to be without
    An unanswered wish
    +++++++++++++++++++++
    You Said...

    You said you would always be there
    I'm tired of being lonely
    You said you would always lend a sholder
    I'm tired of crying
    You said you would always belive
    I'm tired of waiting

    Know that your gone
    Knowing you wont come back
    Leads my heart and soul
    To a place unsought




    Submitted on 2006-02-03 15:58:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty good poem. The last stanza didn't really work with it. More specifically, the last line. It doesn't fit. But its good imagery, and definitely very emotional. The first part was really good.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by mysweetsuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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