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    dots Submission Name: Darkness withindots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1057
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 653



    Description:
        Hey,

    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote this poem when I first started poetry, I'm not sure what I was feeling at the time.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven


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    dotsDarkness withindots
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    Darkness will rule before we die
    No matter what we do;
    All we can do is wait
    Hope is all we have
    Evil is coming, Evil is amoung us

    We'll fall into the darkness
    We cannot run it will find us
    It's too late for us to try
    It's coming, It's amoung us

    In the light we will hide
    In the dark we will fail
    No one can stop it, all will try
    Darkness is coming, Darkness is amoung us

    It will conquer, though we try
    It will happen before we thought
    Death is coming, Death is amoung us

    I pray for us all




    Submitted on 2006-02-03 16:05:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Quite a few spelling erros in this. However, this is a really great write and if you changed the errors I'm sure that the whole thing will become even better. I loved the images I got from this and the darkness of it without being to stupid.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a good poem. But it seemed like it basically repeated the same thing over and over (ie darkness) Overall though, I liked it.
    x caroline
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by mysweetsuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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