Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Darkness withindots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1027
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 653



    Description:
        Hey,

    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote this poem when I first started poetry, I'm not sure what I was feeling at the time.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDarkness withindots
    -------------------------------------------


    Darkness will rule before we die
    No matter what we do;
    All we can do is wait
    Hope is all we have
    Evil is coming, Evil is amoung us

    We'll fall into the darkness
    We cannot run it will find us
    It's too late for us to try
    It's coming, It's amoung us

    In the light we will hide
    In the dark we will fail
    No one can stop it, all will try
    Darkness is coming, Darkness is amoung us

    It will conquer, though we try
    It will happen before we thought
    Death is coming, Death is amoung us

    I pray for us all




    Submitted on 2006-02-03 16:05:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Quite a few spelling erros in this. However, this is a really great write and if you changed the errors I'm sure that the whole thing will become even better. I loved the images I got from this and the darkness of it without being to stupid.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a good poem. But it seemed like it basically repeated the same thing over and over (ie darkness) Overall though, I liked it.
    x caroline
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by mysweetsuicide | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    89975

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Cover written by saartha
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Carry written by saartha
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Dream written by closetpoet
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry