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    dots Submission Name: I'll Be Your Shoulderdots

    Author: darkwinged
    ASL Info:    17/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 184/217/74
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 1210
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This dedicated to my friends. They've all (more or less) been very depressed and sad lately...

    Just thought I'd let you know. Just tell me what you think:
    yea, nay, sure, whatever...just your thoughts.

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    dotsI'll Be Your Shoulderdots

    I wish I knew what was wrong.
    Maybe nothing is.
    Maybe it's everything.

    I just wish I could hold you in my arms,
    And cry with you.
    Share your pain,
    And not make you carry your burdens alone.

    The look in your eyes...
    It makes me cry.
    How am I supposed to help,
    When I don't know what's wrong?

    You aren't as hyper
    Or happy as
    You were before all this.

    I can't go back in time
    And fix things.
    But trust me when I tell you this,
    If I could make everything right,
    I would fix it all
    Just to see a smile on your face again.

    You still do smile,
    But I can tell
    That it's forced.
    I want to see a real smile
    One that you're not hiding behind.
    A genuine smile,
    One that's not pained.

    I'll just sit and listen.
    I won't say a word.
    I promise.
    And this promise I will not break.

    I would be your shoulder to cry on,
    If only you would let me.

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      this is a great poem. I like how much i can relate to it. I have been both the shoulder to cry on, and the person needing the shoulder. Right now i am looking for a shoulder to cry on. i don't know why though. it's complicated.
    urs truly,
    heartless coel
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by His goth child | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome poem
    kud relate to it till the end
    -nice to know u feel for ur friends so much
    keep the great work :|>
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      for first time i am finding someon really really caring, i wish i could have a person like you, so much understanding, as my friend but everyone is not that luckly to have you, your friends are blessed.

    most of the time the problem is that we don't know what is hurting our dear friend and they won't say it thinking that we will not understand and they suffer and one suffers watching them in pain.

    forgive me if i am wrong but it looks like this poem is for you, maybe you didn't found someone who listen you with patience, maybe there is so much pain inside which is not shared by someone, maybe you cry alone in the nights, maybe you are looking for someone who will believe in you, maybe you are lonely.
    this is what i was able to relate it but am sorry if these are not what is truth.

    but i believe it is

    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      you seem like a very dedicated friend and that is something to be very proud of...the poem was good and I think that you did a good job at expressing what you wanted.
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Fake smiles are my specialty so I know what you are trying to express. Your friend will come to you when she/he is ready. Meanwhile this poem is very good. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      <3 I love it. It's really sweet and it makes me almost want to cry.Ha. I'm not really sure what else to say. I suppose I'm not to good at giving comments. Keep writing, great job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by AmorVincitOmnia | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats what being a real friend is all about from the way it sounds you must have an abundance and if not I can tell that you are probably a friend to everyone. That is an awsome feeling. Great poem and keep it up.

    much LOVE
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]

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