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    dots Submission Name: Dieing Youngdots

    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    dotsDieing Youngdots

    In the darkness where i dwell,
    I cut my wrist,
    It bled like hell.

    I cut my wrist to watch it flow,
    It told me a story and I came
    to know.

    I came to know that the
    world hates me,
    Maybe dieing young is
    in my destiny.

    Well its to late now,
    theres no turning back,
    because there is much
    blood I seem to lack.

    My head is spinning and I come
    to see.
    Dieing young is my destiny.

    Im leaving all those behind,
    Crying while doing because I hate
    To find.

    I hate to find them following me,
    In my footsteps, its not their destiny.

    Its mine not yours,
    So leave it be.
    You had a future unlike me.

    I really dont want it to end
    this way, but I think more
    and more and just seem to

    Stray away into the darkness
    Where Im about to dwell.
    Saying the Lords prayer,
    Not goin to hell.

    Im going to be with
    God, where i'll be
    Happy again, and I
    Soon will see, dieing
    Young was my

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      i love how you wrote this poem, i can completely understand it.
    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
    very nice :)
    but it could use a lil. work repeating the lines one after another is not really my style.

    its yours.
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      suicide...death oh the pressious things in lyfe.it reminds me of myself a few weeks ago i was willing to give up cause i knew the world would drive me to insanity.but hey after you watch someone commit suicide you'll feel abit diferent about it.for awhile anyway.i like morbid poetry i can relate to, though at first if you glance at it you'd think you use the "destiny" thing to much but when you actually read it, it fits in perfectly.well over all good write keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]
      This my TRUE OPINION:
    Please tell me this is NOT a suicide note to everybody, cause that would just be sad. I had an ex-b/f almost commit suicide-but we were able to stop it.

    If it's not, then...
    This is overflowing with anger, hatred, depression, and everything. Like, extremely full of it all. A kind of "i hate everything, and you all can just leave me alone while i sit here and wallow in my pain and thoughts..."

    It's kind of almost sad if this is true. You should honestly reach out to someone. Im not trying to nag, but suicide is a very touchy subject to me, and it's okay i think to write about it, but not to actually do it.

    Sorry...i got on a speil there. It's sort of repetitive, but the rhymings not bad.

    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought your poem was pretty good. I guess some people are just destined to die young. That they are called to heaven. good job
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]

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