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    dots Submission Name: Complete Oppositesdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 649
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    Bytes: 866



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    dotsComplete Oppositesdots
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    You yell as I softly speak,
    You get mad while I keep my head,
    You keep hurting me but I still try helping,
    and as mean as you get the nicer I will be.

    While you don't know I am secure,
    You jump of happiness but I'm still sad and blue,
    Betray me all you will I will still be loyal like a dog,
    Complete opposites is what thats called.

    My view so much clearer than before,
    Enough tears for a lost cause,
    As much as I would like another way,
    To end what tore from me so much.

    Your view so clouded,
    So indifferent and so cold,
    Stubborn until the end,
    Still having the memories of us.

    So while you try to move on,
    I will in depression sulk,
    We are true complete opposites,
    Meant to be nevermore.




    Submitted on 2006-02-03 20:12:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of most relationships really. When one feels loving, the other doesn't want to be touched- and vice-versa. But I sense a deeper reading in this. That maybe this particular relationship has come to an end.
    Endings are never really good.. but it does leave way to a fresh new beginning.

    Complete opposites - An interesting read.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem you have here. It focuses on opposites in every sense of a relationship. You know they say opposites attract and I think it all started back when man was created as God showing some sort of sick sense of humor. He made man and woman and then made them attracted to each other. Two totally different sexes with different feelings, thoughts, etc...and made them want to be together. Damn! haha! Of course, that is only if you believe that whole adam and eve thingy. Anyway, I have had these kinds of relationships and ya know, they kinda suck. It seems like constant work just trying to relate to someone that you are so different from. But you really cant help who you are attracted to so perhaps we are our own worst enemy? Very good poem you have here. So very true indeed. Hope you feel better soon!! Take care my friend.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I really, and I mean really liked reading this. It actually reminds me of my current situation, lol. Not good for 2 such things to make complete sense in comparison, but nothing of it says a bad thing for the poem, just that I feel ya.
    I hope your situation that spurred this write got better.

    The only thing I noticed off with this was the lack of flow. other than that, it rocks, rocks major!
    Good job
    ~Rob~
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]


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