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    dots Submission Name: Scoredots
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    Author: SpartanSteve
    ASL Info:    20/m/texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 41/54/45
    Words: 695
    Class/Type: Prose/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 216
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       Say what you think. It was just some random writing I had scribbled off in Journalism last year. Loosely based on factual events. Different stuff to come soon.


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    dotsScoredots
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    "Ah!", I yelled. I handed the guitar back to my friend and tried to find the source of my pain. I looked at my arm and beyond my drunken haze I realized that I had ashed my cigarette on my own arm. I brushed the ash away and took the guitar back.
    "Yeah, I'll play it", I said. They had asked me to play 'Roll Another Joint' by Tom Petty.

    * * *
    I sat in the living room massaging my burn as my dad handed me a plate of sausage and eggs. "Woah, hey, howdja get that burn there?", he said as he looked at my arm and then up at me.
    "I walked into someone and their cigarette burned my arm". I took a bite of the sausage as we watched the news.

    * * *
    I looked down at the scab on my arm. It was going to heal okay. I rested my head and closed my eyes. I didn't feel like doing the reading assignment. I didn't feel like doing much of anything.
    "Hey, what's wrong?", My eyes were closed, but I knew who was asking.
    "You only rest your head like that when something's wrong".
    "I'm alright, just feeling crappy".
    I could feel her gaze fall to my scab. "Hey, did someone put a cigarette out on you or something?"
    "No, I was just really drunk last weekend and I dropped an ash on myself".
    I heard her get out of her desk and I suddenly convulsed with laughter as she started tickling me.

    * * *
    I glanced at my burn, it was just a pink slick of skin now, maybe the size of a red-hot. My stomach was full of butterflies, maybe bees. I swallowed my last bite of hot dog and looked deep into her eyes. On the field below us the football game was in an uproar. A 35 yard pass had been launched and caught as we held each other's stare.
    "Becca, will you go out with me?"
    "Touchdown Eagles!", shouted the announcer.




    Submitted on 2006-02-03 22:39:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm a piece about a cigarette burn that actually kept my attention and then made me want more... hmm im such a greedy women, oh well. I like this piece as well as the other stories. This one was just like the history of the burn... but it worked weird... im jealous wish i could write like you... Well like i said please write more and let me know when you do. Im gonna go play some piano now so i will chat at ya later love. Ciao for now, Amber
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful. It's really honest, pretty much just what goes on in high school. Looking back, that's how memories are: each moment blends into the next, and you can't quite remember the in-between. Its great how I can tell that the narrarator likes her before he asks her out, and that she says yes, even though its not explicitly stated. Is there more to this? If so, I'd love to read it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by PrettyLostGirl | [ Reply to This ]



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