I love this piece. Despite the fact that it's short, the simplicity of the piece really makes it impacting! Again, the imagery really helps to connect with the piece as a whole.
Honestly... It reminds me of my past lover. ...actually, a lot of things remind me of him, but whatever. Seriously, at times it was so incredibly difficult to love him, to remain by his side. However, it was also the greatest most beautiful thing in my world. His body might be gone... but he will never feel me. Especially now, it is increasingly difficult to continue loving him. Not a day goes by that I regret my love though. *smiles*
P.S. Oh, I was meaning to ask you this earlier, but it slipped my mind. Since you asked me... are you a fan of TJT?
This reminds me of a friend of mine. She alwasy writes cute little letters to things like 'the dryer' or her car, and they always have this ironic appreciation met with a pesimistic repetition of their task. For that, I love you for writing this! I haven't seen her in almost a year because I left for college... you would love her, I can tell already. Great poem!
this is a nice little poem. i really like the idea. but what i find when i right short poems is that you have to make every word count to get your point across. so if it were me, i might change the third line a little, and think of another word for "so" that adds emphasis instead of just italicizing it. i would also try something other then the word "hard". it's just such of broad term you know. if it were me i'd bust out the thesaursus and try to find a word with more of a punch. it's amazing the differant things and ways to present a poem you can think of just by looking up a word in a thesaurus, at least it think so. but the poem is deffinatly good. i would say its still above average the way it is right now, so nice job.
I get from this poem that a parent possibly in everyway possible causes some kind of disorder in your life like the trends you listed and then when you look closely you see it's all not so bad. It's even accpetable like a treand, that is normally a no-no. Simple, and to the point. Nice work.
Another writer who dares to brave the theme of laundry, the final frontier of poetry. It's a lonely club we have. I must say, yours is a bit more elegant. And of course it explores one more area of fitting in, without saying so. I like it.
This is a very interesting metaphor you have here. I like it. You speak of all the drabs and problems with the clothing you wear, and those damn shoe laces that never seem to stay tied...I never understood why some shoe laces always untie themselves. Some sort of evil conspiracy or something hahaha! Just like them socks that constantly fall down inside your shoe...ohhhh I hate that. Anyway, this is a good poem. All of the things that make life difficult can also make life worthwhile. A very good message you have put in your words. Very nice. Welcome to Elite. Take care.