i liked this poem..i liked the eternal rhyme of the first line...it allowed it to flow together...at first i didn't like the line "watching and watching over me" i had thought it redundant...but the more i read, the more it seemed to fit..so i liked it...but i wonder if somehow, there is a more effecient way to introduce that...well i doubt it...i still like the way you did it. good job. *barbie*
very nice. the repetition is especially effective. ironic how it was about watching over you and then no one even looked at it. I am glad I did though. it's a very neat poem. I especially like the first line:
The night has eyes and so does the sky
you could go in so many directions from that one line.