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    dots Submission Name: Inside & Like An...dots

    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote this poem when I first started poetry, I'm not sure what I was feeling at the time for the first one, but the second one I remeber being locked out of my house watsching leaves and things in the wind and the poem came to me.

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    dotsInside & Like An...dots


    Deep dark hole
    No light in sight
    long tunnel
    Painful memories and feelings
    Twisting path of hatred
    Through the dieing maze
    Past the trees
    Shaped like claws of pain
    Waiting to grasp and destroy
    Any joyful being
    Never ending corrider
    Of rich blood red colors
    Black souless pictures
    Staring back
    Like An...

    Like an feather caught in the wind
    our lives float by
    No matter what we do or day
    Mother Nature will take it's course

    Like an ant under a magnifying glass
    Our lives are filled with torture
    No matter what we do or say
    Father Grim willl hold the glass

    Like children in a line
    Our lives don't matter
    No matter what we do or say
    Sister Heaven picks her favorites

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      After reading these and the other post you made, I am hoping that your outlook on life has improved over the years.. There is a lot emotion in these words and they paint a sad picture for me in my head..
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]

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