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    dots Submission Name: A lost child, A lost wishdots

    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote this poem when I first started poetry, I'm not sure what I was feeling at the time.

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    dotsA lost child, A lost wishdots

    Down the hall
    Stands a room
    A room empty
    empty of all
    All thought, all feeling

    A dark room
    A barred window
    A concrete floor
    A single cot
    A locked door

    In the corner
    Lays a child
    Lost in the cold
    Whispers of life
    Fad away

    Splashes of light
    Bring past hope
    Split seconds
    Of what is gone
    Jagged lines across the sill

    Nobody notices
    The room, locked
    Nobody notices
    A lost child
    Lost in the darkness

    A last breath
    A last hope
    A last thought
    A last choice

    A child with one wish
    A wish to be found
    On last wish
    But a whisper in the air
    A forgotton whisper

    Submitted on 2006-02-04 11:47:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very interesting.. to me it sounds like the hall could be a mind.. and the child is lost in her mind waiting to be rescued. Its a sad poem and I think the emotion is there.. good job especially for one of your first poems.
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]

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