I like it, but to me, it was kinda average. Something that you hear all the time, almost like your grandparents same-ol-same-ol speaches about "back in the day". It was good, but definately not original. Keep writing though, I want to see more of your work.
this piece makes me feel i little sad . it makes me think of a woman being misstreated . i know the feeling of wanting to die of all the pain inside , but i hope that you really don't feel this way inside . your writiing is very moving and i believe there is more inside you than this pain . i would love to read more !