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    dots Submission Name: Vincent De Flaredots
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    Author: Swanne
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 258/206/43
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 282
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1237



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       Eh..it was a quirky idea that came to me..
    hope you enjoy


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    dotsVincent De Flaredots
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    He was a gnarled old man,
    Named Vincent De Flare,
    It was a chilly October night,
    When he fell asleep in his armchair,
    No tobacco pipe in his mouth
    Or fire in the hearth alight,
    In fact it was lightly snowing
    And the wind carried a bite,
    Where the trouble first started
    Was the frayed leg of his pant,
    A flame formed out of thin air
    Its crackle singing an ominous chant,
    As the fire crawled up his leg
    Vincent didn’t even take a leap
    Perhaps he was very tired
    He didn’t even wake from sleep,
    Something was not quite right
    This was an odd little fire,
    It didn’t spread about the house
    Only poor Vincent fueled the flames higher,
    His wrinkled skin was the wax
    And his doomed soul was the wick,
    Through the cold night it consumed him
    Sad to say his death was not quick,
    In the morning came a caller
    She looked to and froe,
    A small screamed could be heard
    Because all she found was a charred toe,
    So this is the very sad story
    Of Vincent De Flare,
    It is a tale that warns the reader
    of the fatal fire that forms out of air.




    Submitted on 2006-02-04 20:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I thought it was kind of funny. like a Irish tale or Limerick . I liked the part "A small screamed could be heard
    Because all she found was a charred toe."
    Maybe it was not ment to be funny? And if not I am sorry for laughing!
    It was very good to read and I did enjoy it!!!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Swanne,
    another nice, extremly original piece of work.
    This one I had to read several times, looking for the deeper meaning, the hidden message. I'll stop looking now, but I still think it's there. There's more to the story of Vincent De Flare!

    didn't anyone catch the name.

    Donn

    ps: I liked the other picture.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      What a mystery you pan out for us to ponder on. this was a very good write and I loved the rhyme shceme of this. You had me from the start to it's end. I think this would be a nice movie one day. You did good Swanne.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe Mr. De Flare was a victim of spontaneous human combustion.1. there is no fire lit in the fireplace L6 (((backing up))) 2. he wasn’t smoking L5. 3. The flame formed out of thin air L11-32 4. He didn’t jump L14 5. He was still sleeping L16 6. the fire was contained which does fall in line with the stories something that has great intensity but is snuffed out quickly. It is curious how the fire does that, from what I do know about it, it is an internal fire burning outward. Which is where I take the “formed out of thin air” as a figure of speech. 7. All that remains is a charred toe L28

    the story is a good representation from what I know. I do not know how fast the event happens. It does make one wonder what causes this types of events. Is it a disturbance in the space time continuum? Something that came from hell? Perhaps a chemical reaction in the body? it is one of those mysteries that no one that I ever read of was an eyewitness to the event. What I would do to improve this write is break up the stanzas into four or eight but that is entirely up to you of course. Your rhymes are flawless the context is superbly understandable the only thing I see is the structure of write. Wonderfully done,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      MAN! How did I miss this one!
    HA!

    DAAARRRRRR! The sea is angry!

    Oh, wait, this is not a sailors tale, but has the majesty and mystery of one.

    I really liked the wax and wick part...soul and skin. Nice touch!

    Good write Swanneeee-na-neeeeeeee!
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]



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