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    dots Submission Name: The Night & Two itemsdots
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    Author: Silent_Tears
    ASL Info:    16/f/BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 90/111/59
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
        Hey,

    A couple of days ago I started to search for my old poetry book, so I can make a newer updated one. Here is some poems from the old one. I wrote these poems when I first started poetry. The first one "The Night" is about the night I found out my grandpa was dead. THe second one was about how awful it was knowing my grandpa and cat were gone now, and I was so alone.

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    Raven


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    dotsThe Night & Two itemsdots
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    The Night

    Far in the distance
    But so close
    The world freezes
    Feelimgs flow
    It can't be true
    I say as the tears
    Fill my soul
    Down the cheek like a thousand diamounds
    Across the once smiling lips
    Now sealed tight
    Once all was bright
    But now all swirls towards darkness
    ----------------------------
    Two items

    Two items held on a pedestal
    Now fall
    Two items once as fragile as glass
    Now brocken
    Two items one placed in my heart
    Now ripped out
    The stabbing feeling
    Grows worse everyday
    The sharp metal piercing my heart
    Deeper and deeper
    Bits and pieces of my life crumbled away
    Like dust as easy as it had been created
    Two items held on a pedestal
    Now fall
    Two items once as fragile as glass
    Now brocken
    Two items one placed in my heart
    Now ripped out




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