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    dots Submission Name: real shitdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsreal shitdots
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    to my, my homies, with the deuce, I'll die for a friend
    ya'll fucked up, if you start to begin
    talkin ya shit, make me spray
    AK, when you lit up
    blood, up in your stomach, rises up, and then u spit up
    you missing the reason we started the aberrant kings
    its us, 2 killas, you don't know about these things
    robbin hood steals shit and keeps it for us
    our homies darksyde stole us a tour bus
    we travelin the world in our dreams
    the shit becomes reality at least I hope, well it seems
    life is passing me by with every blunt that I smoke
    one day I know it's over and life will end with a choke
    you say you understand, but you really don't know
    you say your style is the greatest, its more like so-so
    I think its time we made a song for foxes with a slow creep
    don't even try to test me, you end up dead on your feet
    twist it around back words you'll see the killa is me
    but don't try to act like you be the greatest mc
    because the greatest aren't always shown on MTV

    remember that...




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      I thought this was really good. I could almost hear a song playing when I read this.
    "AK, when you lit up
    blood, up in your stomach, rises up, and then u spit up"
    that's my favorite part...i'm not sure why yet, but anyways you did a great job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by josephina | [ Reply to This ]
      you say you understand, but you really don't know
    you say your style is the greatest, its more like so-so

    this was good. i really liked these lines because there are a lot of emcees who think that they're the [censored] and there's nothing special about em. there just another "gangsta" rapper with no kind of originality.

    but don't try to act like you be the greatest mc
    because the greatest aren't always shown on MTV

    another good line. yeah i've seen a few dudes on elite that i think should be out selling records right now. orpheus and xtremegentleman are some of the have written some of the illest [censored] i've ever seen and they should definitely hit the mainstream and show everybody what hip hop is all about. good job justin. peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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