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    dots Submission Name: Asking Forgivenessdots
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    Author: ArtichokeMosher
    ASL Info:    15/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 146/201/81
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 192
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1243



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       I don't know where this came from.I wrote it when I was angry at my mom and dad for favoring my brother.They wouldn't ley my b/f come over...but they let him go to his girlfriends.Which I think is unfair and not right.Now,I feel I crushed him because of what they did.But,I don't know.Let me know what you think.


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    I sit here listening to our favoirte love song,
    Trying to figure out where I went wrong.

    I'm regretting what I messed up...

    Waiting for your call all night,
    Crying becuase I wasn't right.

    How did I mess up so bad?

    Warming your heart and turning is black,
    Is one regret I can't take back.

    That wasn't my intention...

    My plan was to keep you forever in eternity...
    Then I revealed the fucked up side of me...

    Please forgive me...

    For a little while I was the one of your dreams...
    Now I'm just lost in a sea of bloody streams...

    How could I do this to the one I love?

    Too many times I've made you cry...
    Too many times I made you wish to die...

    Sorry you fell in love with a cold hearted soul...

    That isn't the way I want you to be treated...
    But now as it stands your love for me remains defeated...

    I'm sorry...I crushed you

    I lost so many in the past...
    But I was sure this one love would last.

    I'm sorry...




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      This was you angry towards your parents? I would have pegged it as you mad at your bf. Espically when you said "How could I do this to the one I love?" or "Sorry you fell in love with a cold hearted soul". Its great and I love the wording. You sounded kinda Schizo when you said "My plan was to keep you forever in eternity...
    Then I revealed the [censored]ed up side of me..."
    NIce work love <<3
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]



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