Description: this is the whole vampires poem that was originally going ot be on here first but I had to find it agian ()()()()()()()()()***)()( peace
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Vampires I hold court with
The only day walker among them
I too have a secret I hide from the others
the others would kill me if they found out about the real me ,
The vamps would never control their urges to feed .
needing to feed they look at me and I swear that I have nothing for them
but still they come and then blaze pipes up
"we have found out your secret werewolf now it is time to die " NO I scream but it is impossable to get away from them
This will only hurt for a second then you'll be dead young one."
No I said you will be the dead ones
the clouds roll away revealing the moon my eyes get huge I feel the need to rip off my shirt and howl at the beautifly full moon untill the vampires scurry away no matter I will find them and kill them all tonight the wizard will help me stay in this form until I kill every last one of those unmortal beings that hunt at night invading my truff .
I here in the distance the call of my mate the other werewolf in town I hope that the vampires leave him alone because I can't move for some reason and then I see why the vampires have dobble crosses me they tricked me into staying in their lair for the night but they have called the werewolf hunter to come kill me .
I feel the bullet hit my hand it causes unbearable pain
he shots again misses and then I look and
I see that it is my lover who has killed me
he shots again and hits me in the heart
I cry out in pain
why didnt he use silver bulletsthat would
have ended it sooner for him and I
I suffer at his hands yet agian in my ture form untill the sun comes up and the normal bulets take effect
a strong wind blows my sent out over the land
and if you try you can still smell the garlic on my breath .
It's a pitty though the vampires still didn't dicover my whole secret you see because I was gay and the one who bit me told me that he was a werewolf and I said that it didn't matter
I ws sleeping when he bit me that fateful night of hte full moon two years ago ....
Again I have to say it's very emotional and gripping. The story behind it and the persona are very, i suppose believable is the best word! I'm only going to say spelling just because it's the only thing that ruins this poem, otherwise it's very good!
Yeah, just a few minor spelling errors, but this really a really beautiful write. I love the part of it where you were talking about how your lover was the one that killed you. That was really emotional. Theending was very gripping, I love how you said to be continued...possibly, I liked that a lot. Hoping to see more from you,
Submission Name: vampires # 2
