vampires # 2
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this is the whole vampires poem that was originally going ot be on here first but I had to find it agian ()()()()()()()()()***)()( peace
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vampires # 2
vampire ------------------------------------------- Vampires I hold court with The only day walker among them I too have a secret I hide from the others the others would kill me if they found out about the real me , The vamps would never control their urges to feed . needing to feed they look at me and I swear that I have nothing for them but still they come and then blaze pipes up "we have found out your secret werewolf now it is time to die " NO I scream but it is impossable to get away from them This will only hurt for a second then you'll be dead young one." No I said you will be the dead ones the clouds roll away revealing the moon my eyes get huge I feel the need to rip off my shirt and howl at the beautifly full moon untill the vampires scurry away no matter I will find them and kill them all tonight the wizard will help me stay in this form until I kill every last one of those unmortal beings that hunt at night invading my truff . I here in the distance the call of my mate the other werewolf in town I hope that the vampires leave him alone because I can't move for some reason and then I see why the vampires have dobble crosses me they tricked me into staying in their lair for the night but they have called the werewolf hunter to come kill me . I feel the bullet hit my hand it causes unbearable pain he shots again misses and then I look and I see that it is my lover who has killed me he shots again and hits me in the heart I cry out in pain why didnt he use silver bulletsthat would have ended it sooner for him and I I suffer at his hands yet agian in my ture form untill the sun comes up and the normal bulets take effect a strong wind blows my sent out over the land and if you try you can still smell the garlic on my breath . It's a pitty though the vampires still didn't dicover my whole secret you see because I was gay and the one who bit me told me that he was a werewolf and I said that it didn't matter I ws sleeping when he bit me that fateful night of hte full moon two years ago .... |
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Again I have to say it's very emotional and gripping. The story behind it and the persona are very, i suppose believable is the best word! I'm only going to say spelling just because it's the only thing that ruins this poem, otherwise it's very good!| | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by irvine_valentin | [ Reply to This ] | Yeah, just a few minor spelling errors, but this really a really beautiful write. I love the part of it where you were talking about how your lover was the one that killed you. That was really emotional. Theending was very gripping, I love how you said to be continued...possibly, I liked that a lot. Hoping to see more from you, | *Sarah* | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ] | This way really well written. You have a few spelling errors, don't worry everyone does. Keep on writing, your work is beautiful and intriging | | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ] | |
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