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    dots Submission Name: the pen of poisondots

    Author: Robbing Hood
    ASL Info:    16/m/Ark
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/35/10
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 752
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       this is showing the acidic side my my rap

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    dotsthe pen of poisondots

    and now I write with the poison pen
    the one that has power of fate-you lose, I win
    I continue to write with the pen of sin
    with this pen I slit your neck leaving you with no way to defend
    do you know where poison pen been
    with poison pen threats of murder send
    pen creating poison rhyme, so acidic
    poison enters the brain and changes, I did it
    I change your personal views with nothing more than ink
    forcing you to listen and think
    about the poison the seeps through your pours
    the pen, a greater force than nuclear cores
    with this atomic force in my hand
    my brain creates a terroristic plan
    to destroy all those
    that step to the kings with thoughts to oppose
    this pen is like no other for the poison it contains
    has the power to crawl in through your ears and all through your brain

    Submitted on 2006-02-05 20:04:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      man this one is alright. u had a few good lines in it.

    about the poison the seeps through your pours
    the pen, a greater force than nuclear cores

    that was propably the best 2 lines in this one. peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem, it made me think for a while about what you where saying in it. Intreaging would describe it. Could you have perhaps been writing with the poison pen when you wrote this? You really take the reader through your mind when you wrote this and i think the pen is in every writers hand at one point when writing. The only thing I could suggest is that you try and wrap it up a little better. It just kind of stops. Overall a good read!
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      very umm bloody lol diffrent ... di you enjoy writing this?
    this sucks they want more words but what happens when your out lol babbling...
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by nightxassassin | [ Reply to This ]

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