Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: ~Falling...~dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: _NowOrNever_
    ASL Info:    16/Female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 65/90/45
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 241
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1319



    Description:
       This is very true on my part. Every word it true. Family wise, i'm brokenhearted


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots~Falling...~dots
    -------------------------------------------


    My silhouette seems to crumble from my sorrow.
    I’m just waiting to see you tomorrow
    So I’ll be able to hold on
    Grasp all immortality I have left
    With all my thoughts running
    I’m losing all my breath
    Feel like I’m falling….
    falling…
    falling…
    into a twisted confusion
    where I’m supposed to find myself
    but it’s so hard
    when everyone is judging me
    and it’s so hard
    when I’m trying to watch my parents argue
    day in and day out
    hoping I’ll find someway out
    hoping to find what life
    is really all about

    Wait for moon and stars to come
    and I’ll cry under them
    every night
    nobody knows.
    I’ve lost my innocent, naive glow
    All secrets have been revealed
    I’m no longer under the protection
    of my mother
    Even though she’s here
    I’ve broke through her barrier
    And found out what my life
    Truly consists of
    It doesn’t consist of love
    Just of money, faults, blame, and hurt.
    When I found this out
    I felt like I was falling….
    falling…
    falling…
    Confusion and depression seeped into my bones
    as I stepped into my new world alone…

    ~Kim Brandt~




    Submitted on 2006-02-05 20:19:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I'm really sorry to hear that this poem is true...the time of your life you are at is always difficult, even without having to suffer things like these.

    I can only hope things get better for you, and hope for a better tomorrow.

    Best of luck to you
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      OH YES I LOVED IT SO MUCH. O MY GOSH I LOVE YOU. That was just so...so...so my life there. But the most of my life was in this part
    'Feel like I’m falling….
    falling…
    falling…
    into a twisted confusion
    where I’m supposed to find myself
    but it’s so hard
    when everyone is judging me
    and it’s so hard
    when I’m trying to watch my parents argue
    day in and day out
    hoping I’ll find someway out
    hoping to find what life
    is really all about'
    that was my favorite part cause its true thats how my life is where everyone is judging you and tryin to tear you down as you wish you could go home to a loving family when you only find a hate dad and a broken mom and your brother is somewhere in the gulf so ya your poem just read my life keep writing that was good I mean very good I MEAN VERY GOOD like godly good but still it was so awsome cause like its not saying I want attention not sayin that everyones dose but yours is obviece its not a care for attention its the truth to life and the key that opens the door to opening peoples eyes to the truth of life what is realy going on that you cannot hide behind a loved one always counting on them to shield you from the truth and how others can judge you for something you aren't and are but reguardless that poem was awsome insanely awsome keep writing like that. oh and I hope for things to get better for you.

    -Ryan PEACE OUT
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by the heartless | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.