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    dots Submission Name: a poets roomdots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 921
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 550



    Description:
       just some random thoughts


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    dotsa poets roomdots
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    It is some how my muse
    my book shelves filled with magic
    my desk is cluttered yet nice and neet
    a type writter and note books
    some pens cd's and records
    my tv is shit
    the air smells of smoke
    the walls covered with faces of the past
    photos spread across the floor
    my records too
    one is playing (london calling)
    as i right on the merrors and on the cealing







    i need something new

    a blank canvas




    Submitted on 2006-02-05 20:50:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this is really good. even though its short it is still full of thought and detail. i would recommend this poem to everyone. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      this is actually really interesting. it shows who you are because thats how i look at my room and it as "my world". this is a cool way of showing who you are but the ending was kinda off. i liked it but it was kinda off. Nice job

    -BleedingTears
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your use of everyday objects in a simple commentary. I was able to picture the room and I like that you said you need a blank canvas at the end. Somewhere new to express yourself. Good stuff. All i'd say is watch your spelling, there are a few errors that could use revising.
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by artsyhippie | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it i think its really good
    umm you seem like you lost your first muse and you just need to release your mind and soul in to your write but i like it
    | Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by robbie | [ Reply to This ]


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