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    dots Submission Name: snitch,rat ect.dots
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    Author: nightxassassin
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 51/43/26
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    she hisses in my ear,
    like a fly on the watch,

    She knows when to talk,
    if its to taint my chance,

    She lives in my home,
    and eats off my plates,

    Shes so near,
    it seems unclear,

    she hurts my feelings,
    to make hers feel better,

    shes a lierer and a witch,
    who deserves to rot in a ditch
    (not really)

    ~AUdrey




    Submitted on 2006-02-05 21:48:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It would seem here that you are not overly fond of your sister. Short and to the point, I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Fat_Rob | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very awsume! I love your comparison with a fly and whoever is getting on your last nerve. I really liked your unique spacing and your timing. Very good right.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Very angry. I actually wrote something worse about my ex titled "Hated to the Point." I think this piece was short and sweet. You got your point across. Who is this about? Well, be happy. I should take my own advice.

    Saint Kairo
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Saint | [ Reply to This ]


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