Really dark and creepy, but i like it. i really like how in the middle u kept switching between "I'm gonna kill her" and "No, I want her to be happy." That made want to read more and see if the guy was going to kill the chick or not. Plus i like how u wrote the actual killing part
"She is slowly devoured without hesitation."
this really descibes the scene quite vividly and almost gives a demonic feel to it. But it's the "is none other than me" line that really made me appreciate this poem. I really like that twist.
man this is deep, dark, and depressing... i dont know if this was your intent but that is what i felt. I love the way you told a story throught your poem that felt so real and vivid like i was watching it in the words. I was confused in the end because you said that he didnt want to kill her but then he does anyway? or that she wanted death and asked him to kill her? did he eat her? im not so sure... but truly a great write!
Very dark. Very sad as well. Holding his lost lover in his arms He walks away for all to see For this man draped in Blood Soaked Darkness Is none other than me The way i saw it was that the only way you can have her is in her own death...tell me if i'm wrong please. This was very good saint. Nice job:)
Merry Meet Saint. I like the poem and am going to put it on my favorites list. It is creepy and romantic in a sick sadistic way. Good job. Blessed Be Andrea
Submission Name: Blood Soaked Darkness
