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    dots Submission Name: On Pointdots
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    Author: stateXofXmind
    ASL Info:    18/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.09 - 29/49/21
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 259
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 771



    Description:
       yeah this is how i mostly feel when im at home stuck with my parents mainly my mom, so hope you enjoy!...
    PS i can care less if u people like it or not...its just me...im not into suicide...i can control my self...its just my thougts...


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    dotsOn Pointdots
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    when it gets to the point
    where my body is numb,
    and the only thing I can hear it the beat of their dyeing heart,
    when the pain is so strong
    I can't scream,
    as I fall to my knees
    the only thing I can see is the blood rushing out of my open wounds.
    I can smell the rotting flesh of hate,
    when it gets to the point I know I need help
    but I am unable to reach it
    and I try to crawl to them
    like a broken doll with a spin of string
    as people turn their back to me,
    I know it's to the point where no one can help me
    where I can't even help myself
    and where theres only one thing left
    so as I write this know that I was to the point
    suicide




    Submitted on 2006-02-06 08:23:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      man, you're suicidal! what happened to you? id really like to discuss that with you. can you email me please?
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      This wasn't really that great of a poem. It seems like all the angst emo teenage girls "I wanna kill myself caze the world hates me" things. Maybe if you worked on this a little more and made it stand out from the rest this would be better. But so far it's like half the poems I read.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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