Description: This is one of the first poems that I ever wrote. I didn't post it on Elite Skills because I thought that I already had, but it seems I didn't. Well, its here for you to enjoy now. Hope you like it!
When your dreams crumple and fall,
where do they go?
Do they not leave at all?
Do they just stay down low?
Do they fall, fall, fall
to the depths below?
Are they like a popped beach ball
that you would never show?
Are they like a missed phone call?
Well, anyway, I just want you to know...
If you hold fast to your dreams
they'll never ever go.
This was a good write. Not one of the better ones Ive seen about this subject but good nonetheless. The flow was just a lil off. And You capitalize almost every beginging word, but you missed a few. That just stuck out at me. Good Write.
as much as i hate to follow the crowed..i have to agree with hammyj...this was out of this world! so much imagery and so much meaning all squished into one lill' poem! totally worth the read! keep on keeping on! :D