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    dots Submission Name: Dreamsdots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1058
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 426



    Description:
       This is one of the first poems that I ever wrote. I didn't post it on Elite Skills because I thought that I already had, but it seems I didn't. Well, its here for you to enjoy now. Hope you like it!

    -Shadow


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    dotsDreamsdots
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    When your dreams crumple and fall,
    where do they go?
    Do they not leave at all?
    Do they just stay down low?
    Do they fall, fall, fall
    to the depths below?
    Are they like a popped beach ball
    that you would never show?
    Are they like a missed phone call?
    Well, anyway, I just want you to know...
    If you hold fast to your dreams
    they'll never ever go.




    Submitted on 2006-02-06 09:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good write. Not one of the better ones Ive seen about this subject but good nonetheless. The flow was just a lil off. And You capitalize almost every beginging word, but you missed a few. That just stuck out at me. Good Write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...that's all i have to say. this poem is amazing...i wish i could write like this. keep up the good efforts and i hope to read more of yur poetry in the near future.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by kihyajacqueline | [ Reply to This ]
      as much as i hate to follow the crowed..i have to agree with hammyj...this was out of this world!
    so much imagery and so much meaning all squished into one lill' poem!
    totally worth the read!
    keep on keeping on!
    :D
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wicked! Short sharp to the point and a great point as well. Loved this, every line had me thinking just where do they go. great imagery.
    And a fave addition
    You done good
    :)
    John
    x
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]


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