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    dots Submission Name: The world todaydots

    Author: Akili
    Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 915/400/60
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    dotsThe world todaydots

    We ran away from power
    Spit in its face.
    Said that we would never give in
    No matter what it takes.

    Then you left her
    Alone and with the child
    Whose name you never gave
    And left her for another without half the grace.

    Robin Hood stood for the poor
    The hippies for peace
    The problem with the world today
    No one’ll stand for anything.

    Homeless living on the street
    Ghettos filled with fear and hate
    Is it any wonder to us
    That no one’s felt anything?

    Maybe if the children
    Got together to do more then pray
    Left the horror and adults behind
    We could learn more then what’s our fate.

    Submitted on 2006-02-06 11:52:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanx for your views
    you know using caps saves a bit of time so i was using but now that you adviced i surely will have to use small letters now.
    and whats wrong with sinisters
    i wrote a poem based on my experience & if you were in my place you would have mentioned something else even more disasterous
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by SAMEER | [ Reply to This ]
      *Bows down to your excellence*

    This is such a freakin' great write. i just wish i was in the mood to make a better comment.

    no one stands for anything anymore. no one gives a flying fck. shildren are starving, not only in third world countries but here in the US. why the fck do we let the future starve?? is that insit to what we have to look forward to? a world of nothingness???
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      wow aki... just, wow. i think that this is one of your best poems! i had to giggle after i read this because it reminds me of that song off Shrek 2, the "I need a hero" song, remember that? i think we've sung it in my car a couple of times .
    your third stanza is my favorite, talking about how every generation but ours has stood for something... i mean, seriously, what the hell are we all about? how does any of us expect to make the world better or even liveable if we don't get off our asses to do something about it? (okay, sorry, slightly bitter on this point)
    i also liked the last stanza too, about the little children. why can't we just all take a leaf out of their books and become like them? if everyone was so innocent and pure or at least as lovable then life surely wouldn't be the hell it is today... but then again, it also wouldn't be half of the fun...okay, fine, so i can't make up my mind! love the write aki, keep them coming!

    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      You know what, Ill get the bat signal, you get aquaman, and my friend spider-man will meet us in the middle! If only pal, if only. The world needs more than that. This world is so [censored]ed up its past salvation. The only thing that can be saved is our souls. Anyways, this was a good write.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      well ,my friend that's a really nice profile of the world you got there :)
    totally i need a hero. i need a bruce willis actually. he always saves the day. or rambo. or geek chuck norris :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      If only we had a modern day Batman...Oh..
    ..that's me...WELL, if only we had a not so petty Batman...who comments on this one first...for just that...AHA!

    This is one of those, "We need a hero." poems that you so often write. I love them...shows you have hope...even though most people have lost there hope...I think I might find mine soon...covered in dust and dog hair...and other unpleasant things?

    Bwahahahahaa...and stopped for cookies?

    "But you left me!"

    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]

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