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Day And Night


Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This is about my life and living conditions right now..It's a long story and I wsih I had time to explain but I hope my poem explains some of it Hope you like it..And Chris is the guy i love that keeps me sane and in the right place right now A.K.A - Mylo


Day And Night



Living two different lives
One like day the other like night
Everythings so well until the sun sets
Then comes night the time I love best
Theres not much more for me to say
Other then I hate the day
Me and dayhave never been
Quite on the same page
I've been a night child all my life
That's the way it will always stay
Me and night will always get along
No matter what goes on
And Chris will be like the Northern Star
The one thing that brightens up the night sky
And in my world it will be
Night time for the rest of my life




Submitted on 2006-02-06 14:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this write aswell.but the only thing i can find wrong with it tis the ending.the last sentence i dont think it really rits in to well.but over all it twas good.keep it up
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this a lot and i truly hope to read more by you soon. i'm a night person asd well. i know that a lot of people will be able to relate to this. keep up the great work.
love
tina
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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