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    dots Submission Name: Day And Nightdots

    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is about my life and living conditions right now..It's a long story and I wsih I had time to explain but I hope my poem explains some of it Hope you like it..And Chris is the guy i love that keeps me sane and in the right place right now A.K.A - Mylo

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    dotsDay And Nightdots

    Living two different lives
    One like day the other like night
    Everythings so well until the sun sets
    Then comes night the time I love best
    Theres not much more for me to say
    Other then I hate the day
    Me and dayhave never been
    Quite on the same page
    I've been a night child all my life
    That's the way it will always stay
    Me and night will always get along
    No matter what goes on
    And Chris will be like the Northern Star
    The one thing that brightens up the night sky
    And in my world it will be
    Night time for the rest of my life

    Submitted on 2006-02-06 14:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this write aswell.but the only thing i can find wrong with it tis the ending.the last sentence i dont think it really rits in to well.but over all it twas good.keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this a lot and i truly hope to read more by you soon. i'm a night person asd well. i know that a lot of people will be able to relate to this. keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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