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Let You Go

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 147
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is a poem I wrote a few minutes ago about the guy I love that I have to let go of...I love you baby and I'm gonna miss you

Let You Go

It's gonna be hard for me
To get over you
All I ever did was
Put my heart,soul and trust
Into you
Now your leaving
I understand why
But it doesn't matter
How many tears I cry
We'll never be together
Like we always dreamed we would
I will miss you
With all my heart boy
You know it's true
I just wish I could have
The one chance to actually
Meet you face to face
To say goodbye
And with the necklace around my neck
The one you gave me
Promising I would never give up
Well with this poem I''m writing to you
Baby I want you to promise me
That you'll love me forever
And never let the thought of me go
Fuck boy you know I love you so
But you have to know
I love you enough to let you go

Submitted on 2006-02-06 15:29:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem kidna jumped around a little bit it had rythms at some points and didn't at scertain poems you need ot stick with a certain way you want ot get the poem across for the whole poem and when you weren't using rythm the flow of the poem kidna side tracked off. This had a really good idea and alot of emotion and was good for the most part just one more thing. try to use some other pronoun then boy to explain Mylo boy doesn't really go with the poems oh so well keep writing and I'll keep reading

| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ], I so feel you on this one. I don't know the details, or why you have to let go, but I was there a few months ago. It is one of the hardest things to do, letting go of someone you love. But if you have to, you have to. Just know that the pain doesn't last forever, but the memories do, so try to hold on to them, especially the good ones. Don't forget the bad ones tho, or you may end up in a downward spiral, repeating the same mistakes. You're not alone, channel that pain into your writing, cuz this poem is great.

| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
  The pain here is visable. i agree with Epiphany and don't want to critique soemthing so personal. I do want to say a famous saying "IF you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, it's yours forever, if it doesn't, it wasn't meant to be" the best and worst advice ever. i wish you the best of luck. You're so young and have so many "loves" ahead of you. Be strong as each one will hurt in different ways. Learn and grow from each one. Keep writing!
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a good reminded me of a past "love" the worst part about past love, is it sometimes attacks the present with the painful memories.anyway keep up the good writing...
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by LostInYerTears | [ Reply to This ]
  At 14 this was probably your first real love & those are always memorable - this seemed like a personal poem to him & I don't wish to critique something that is personal and loving.
Keep each other in touch and love will find you again.
Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  this is the art i can nolonger create / this is talent and grace . it pains me to know that leaving is the most hurtful love.

dont quit becuz of me !

Janus William Inkblood
| Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]

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