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Cursed


Author: skinnard
ASL Info:    22 male New York
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Words: 214
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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i'm just lokin for some input. Any relation, feedback, room for improvement?


Cursed



I'm cursed with this poison
destroying my life
Cursed as a vampire
stuck to wander the night
Cursed as a werewolf
lost in the moon
Cursed with a lie
dreams don't come true
I've a date with destiny
and I can't be late
I'm heading for the flames
at an unwanted rate
And these are more than words
it is my life unwritten
So I'm stuck with this curse
and I may never be forgiven
Now Satan's my friend
the Lord is not on my side
Darkness becomes my light
and from sunshine I hide
So I sit here with patience
for Death to be on his way
So until death do us part
this curse is my fate




Submitted on 2006-02-06 18:00:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i can relate to this dark emotion. i feel as if i were cursed and no one can help me. great poem. i feel as if i am damned to hell, in some cases wondering if a god or even hell exist.
| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by diabolicmaggot | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem flows really well, i love the emotion and i can feel the writers pain, it is really deep in my oponion and i really love it! The feeling that the writer puts into not watnting to be like they are and that they want to see the light again is truly amasing!
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by wolfpupgrl14 | [ Reply to This ]


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