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    dots Submission Name: Without Burdendots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 559



    Description:
       From a dream I had - one of those where "IT" was so special feeling words seem to not do enough justice.

    Whether you believe or not - Jesus believed in his great sacrifice that he released us from burden - if only we believe.

    A lot of our pains are self-induced - simply pray and believe and "IT" will take that pain and replace "IT"

    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif


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    dotsWithout Burdendots
    -------------------------------------------


    I soar above the earth
    far away to where the world
    is smaller
    &
    fits in the palm of my hand

    I cradle the world
    lovingly as
    Mother
    Father
    Lover
    Friend

    Be without burden
    I whisper softly
    and repeatedly
    my words a part
    of the cosmos
    and travelling at
    the speed of
    Light

    <@> awaken
    with truth in Love
    &
    without burden









    Submitted on 2006-02-06 18:12:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Be without burden
    I whisper softly
    and repeatedly
    my words a part
    of the cosmos
    and travelling at
    the speed of
    Light"

    well great words epihany .. thanks for the writing you really have good stuff here iandi really enjoy reading your writings.. they are very inspiring well thanks for sharing and i hope you can come by and check out my writing please
    i miss your comments.. lol
    peace and love
    take care
    and have a nice day
    Victor
    p.d: keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Tiff,

    thanks for this one and I just read your journal too, and I believe this to be true. Finding a greater perspective gives us the chance to soar above. My eagle eye is now awakened,
    I must go enjoy a view of the mountains I thought I might have to climb,

    that was before, this is now

    thanks love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      so simple and beautiful, Tiff.. it makes me think of
    that saying "the kingdom of God is within you..."
    such a beautiful image of soaring above the world
    and holding it in the palm of your hand..
    i love the whisper and then to awaken with truth
    in love... no burden, love should never be that.

    as always, Tiff, you've boiled it all down for us into
    beauty and light.

    blessings,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I did not feel like God was being pushed on me as I read this. I love the gentle manner you use to write this. The very manner God uses with us. It was a poem that made rethink my views on God and how I see him. This was well written. It was like being a part of your dream. I'm glad you shared this with us all. Great job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Many compliments here Tiff - and justifiably so. This is enlightening, encouraging, excellent, and really well written and put together. Very inspiring indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so nice, and leaves me feeling a whole lot less "alone" in this majestic universe. It's like the soft whispers of God. Thank you for posting this lovely piece.. and for the description as well.

    It reminds me of that song "He's got the whole world in his hands"- and he does. It's true what you said. A lot of our pains are self-induced.

    And most definitely, leave your magic touch on this. I wouldn't change a thing.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff Epiph, this is why I love you so much.

    You put religion and belief into such simple and beautiful words that silly sinners like me even, have to take notice.

    A stunning poem, I really loved what you did here.

    Be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      another great piece of writing and glad i stopped by to read Thanx for the comment on rampage 15 it was dedicated to what i saw in group homes 35 years ago i dont worry to much about comments as writing is my past time some will like it some dont, even some of the people i work with think i'm wierd as i write poetry
    oh well to each their own
    keep posting so i can read
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany
    I loved this write
    In my belief as we are all Gods children I believe we all control are destiny on this Earth
    We are in charge of our lives and we can change anything we want simply by concentrating and letting in a little of IT
    You know i am finally fully understanding your meaning of IT
    and I have to tell ya
    You are so right what a great and positive way of living your life
    I applaud you
    You my friend are going places
    I hope you realize how many people you have touched with that positivity
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your style of writing, I find it to be very orginal.
    The message in this poem is spoken as if it is coming from Christ himself. Great work.
    God Bless,
    lynn
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty...I do not like the way the stanzas are arranged. It's just too broken. Also, you should really leave out the "&" and "@" symbols, it dumbs down the piece and makes it less profound. Keep working at it, I really appreciate strongly influenced religious pieces.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Twila | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the list of people it just had such a ring to it i loved it ...whats with the <@> u have that in ur other one to...hmm oh well i think for this one u should maybe lose em it kinda takes away from it...


    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]


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