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    dots Submission Name: Bathroom Graffitidots

    Author: Ruby Rivers
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 31/36/10
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Well, basically my school's bathrooms are kinda gross, but some of the graffiti is really neat. And I just think it's an interesting way to express yourself, completely public yet completely anonymous at the same time.

    The stuff in parentheses are actual things people have written.

    ...Tell me what you think, and what needs to be improved.

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    dotsBathroom Graffitidots

    In a dismal high school bathroom stall,
    Words of wit scrawled on the wall
    In permanent marker and ball-point pens,
    Predictions of our bitter ends:

    (Follow your heart,
    And it will lead you to ruin.)

    Don't erase if you've got a heart -
    This ain't graffiti, this is art.
    Anonymous authors illustrate their minds
    For curious readers to casually find.

    (How can this be beauty?)

    Faded and worn by janitor's soap,
    Visions of loss and visions of hope.
    Unspoken thoughts like a bursting heart's blood,
    Lift up your pen, and say what you would.

    Submitted on 2006-02-06 21:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really well done...i love the idea and the way that you have presented it...i agree some of the graffiti we see is most definitely art and some of the words written very profound...this flows and presents your idea just perfectly...stormy
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Merry Meet Ruby. I like the peom very much. I must agree with freese, I would have liked to see more of the writings. Excellent job on taking the mundane and finding beauty. I think we as poets do this best. Keep the insights coming. Blessed Be Andie
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. i think it was creative...not many people can find purity,intelligence and simplicity in bathroom graffiti...i wish there had been more of the actual bathroom writing. i think that would have made it even better...though it must be hard to find good bathroom writings. i do like it a lot though. just a different outlook on something. nice change of pace. it seems so calm, i like that. not trying to shove anything in someones face yet not too passive or anything. anyway nice job.

    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by beth freese | [ Reply to This ]
      I love that.
    I think it's clever how you put the stuff people wrote in parenthesis.
    The wording is awesome too.
    Most people see graffiti on stuff every day and never think that there might be something interesting about some of it. It's cool that you took the time to notice.
    ...And see what it inspired?
    Great job

    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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