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    Author: Jinxed
    ASL Info:    18/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 23/21/14
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I would like critical feed back. I was thinking about how parents tell their children there is a Santa Clause but as they get older they see that he isn't real.


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    Cling to the slip
    thats going to the end
    takes where you want
    things do or don't
    things will and won't

    So silently the honey
    your lies drip into
    the eyes of your children
    Making the world...so sweet

    The honey dries
    cracks
    children see slivers
    of reality

    then the bees come
    and eat away
    hurt and stray
    poison and scorn

    making the children old
    old and naked
    seeing death and poverty
    in the new back yard.




    Submitted on 2006-02-06 23:07:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Old song new words.
    I like the feel of this and I can see your point too. The lies we tell our children even if they are white lies do tend to leave them blind to what is real and what isn't.
    Being a parent allows me to see both side of the coin.
    On one hand we give the child hope of something better and on the other we give them false hopes.
    The end result does not hurt the child but it gives them the ability to see for themself as they grow older what is real and what is not.
    If for some reason they cannot tell the difference then they will be doomed to live their lives in a bubble anyways.
    We as humans were given ability to think for ourselves and therefore will in time see the truth of all things.
    Childrens minds are simple and yet complexed but they have one thing in youth that we as adults forgot about.
    That is being able to imagine all the good in everything we hear and see.
    Why make them miserable in youth by giving them no hope for something beyond what is real..

    Nice write

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]



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