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Author: Jinxed
ASL Info:    18/f/az
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I would like critical feed back. I was thinking about how parents tell their children there is a Santa Clause but as they get older they see that he isn't real.


Cling to the slip
thats going to the end
takes where you want
things do or don't
things will and won't

So silently the honey
your lies drip into
the eyes of your children
Making the sweet

The honey dries
children see slivers
of reality

then the bees come
and eat away
hurt and stray
poison and scorn

making the children old
old and naked
seeing death and poverty
in the new back yard.

Submitted on 2006-02-06 23:07:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Old song new words.
I like the feel of this and I can see your point too. The lies we tell our children even if they are white lies do tend to leave them blind to what is real and what isn't.
Being a parent allows me to see both side of the coin.
On one hand we give the child hope of something better and on the other we give them false hopes.
The end result does not hurt the child but it gives them the ability to see for themself as they grow older what is real and what is not.
If for some reason they cannot tell the difference then they will be doomed to live their lives in a bubble anyways.
We as humans were given ability to think for ourselves and therefore will in time see the truth of all things.
Childrens minds are simple and yet complexed but they have one thing in youth that we as adults forgot about.
That is being able to imagine all the good in everything we hear and see.
Why make them miserable in youth by giving them no hope for something beyond what is real..

Nice write

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