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    dots Submission Name: The Sheets Held Their Breathdots
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    Author: forevertorn
    ASL Info:    16.f.california
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 21/30/19
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 183
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    dotsThe Sheets Held Their Breathdots
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    Your smile matched my happiness,
    I closed my eyes as you held me close,
    Your body pressed against mine was comforting,
    And ceiling stared as you curled your toes...

    Your fingertips caressed the side of my face,
    My back arched as you kissed my neck,
    Your kiss brought ecstacy everytime it was given,
    And the desk and shelves jealously sat...

    Your lips brushed mine,
    Your hands ran down the small of my back,
    Your eyes matched my gaze and when you sighed,
    Even the sheets held their breath...

    ...I love you.




    Submitted on 2006-02-06 23:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really beautiful... I don't know what else to say... I'm adding this to my favorites!!
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I just adored that whole piece. What a great write. It is absolutely precious in every way. There's nothing better than sharing those intimate moments in bed with the one you love. I really enjoyed how the last line of the first three stanzas referred to how the different parts of the room were reacting to your actions. Great idea! Very original. Have a happy Valentine's Day! Keep up the creativity!
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by kissingadict | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the first line to death.. possibly that wasd a bad thing because the first line blew me away and then...the rest just didnt match up. it was still good.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      awww, how cute was this little poem, basically about you and your significant other. congrats it turned out well...what a moment...right?
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      What. Do you have bad breath or something?

    I will, and i surely do.

    Now, lets see if it will let me post. Nope. um, ok, well, um, ok, bad breath, *punch* line.

    I love you. yep. Nothing else to say right now.

    *holds my breath*

    Post?
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by eternally | [ Reply to This ]



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