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    dots Submission Name: Four Legged Joydots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
    Total Views: 772
    Average Vote:    0.0000
    Bytes: 242



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       Not too be taken too seriously- This is one for the Jack Russel- I think I could learn alot from him-


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    dotsFour Legged Joydots
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    Little white dog-
    so fat...
    so smelly...
    see him smile
    when I rub his belly-
    "That dog is dumb!"...
    some might say-
    but he's smarter than most:
    he lives for TODAY.




    Submitted on 2006-02-07 09:36:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sometimes it's fun to not be so darn serious in writing. I'm glad you reminded us that there is a a bit of fun. loved the last line...and I had to feel sorry for the pooch...give him a bath...lol
    jan
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty cute. While I know you're probably unconcerned, I think you can omit the ellipses, and your hyphens should be dashes. This made me smile. I love cute, furry beings, and we could learn a lot from them: they get along with each other far better than people do. Nice one, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute!...one small dog...one short msg...with an awful lot of value...im sure many of us could take more time just to live for today and a scratch on the belly lol...thx for sharing...stormy
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      WOOOOOO HOOOOO!
    that made me smile :) and i haven't been smiling too much lately :) very well done, very cute, very poeticly sound...
    just a great job :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      I love things that make me smile - especially when i'm ill. Concise, endearing and very deep *nods wisely*
    na just kidding - great fun and perfectly portraying the perfections of the kanine :D
    Good write - thank you
    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by The_Angelic_Dea | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha!
    Good canine and human moral here. LOL.
    LIVE FOR TODAY! < I like that.
    Should I aim to be more like a Jack Russel??

    What a neat way of getting a point across.

    Nice- animated- and a bit humorous!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really cute and you are so write
    We can learn a lot from animals
    Animals do treasure every day and live there life not thinking of the future
    They truefully live for today
    And I learned something about myself thru this
    I am a big animal lover and I really dont have any longterm plans either
    I ghuess I live for today as well
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      haha...this made me smile, it's so cute...

    dogs are so unconditional, and i think your poem is so true, they live for the present.

    i sorta imagined a little dog gamboling around the place happily.

    good write, thanks...it made me happy.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Mud | [ Reply to This ]


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