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    dots Submission Name: Ying & Yan Paintingdots

    Author: bleeding-soul
    ASL Info:    17/m/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 94/94/14
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I sort of got the inspiration for this from my friend Jazmine.

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    dotsYing & Yan Paintingdots

    She paints a picture of her life
    Mixture of colors
    Happiness and sadness
    Anger and hate

    On the canvus is painted a heart
    Split in two
    Half of it perfect
    The other half scarred

    In a mixture of grey and white
    A house is painted
    It symbolizes love and security
    Yet fires burns within

    Deep within the painting
    Lies the story of a girl
    With all the love in her heart
    And all the burdens of the world

    Submitted on 2006-02-07 10:44:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of a song

    "And though she's beautiful in photographs,
    I absolutely love her, when she smiles."

    Those are two of the lyrics of the song, but i don't remember the part that reminds me of your poem...

    Oh well,
    This was a cool write for what it was, its sad, but to me, very cliché...The standard girl, or guy, carrying the burden of the world, heart cracked in two, all seems very standard pop song like to me, and I dont' think that's what you were going for.

    | Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this was a great poem!
    I liked it as well. The symbols, the metaphors.
    Deep and good.
    Do please come and check mine out some day when you have the time!

    I just had to add, that the title that caught my eyes very quickly. A great title..
    Black and white. Arent we all?
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice. I can't really write about Jaz in these terms. I can't step back and look at it objectively, I'm too wrapped up in her. This is a lovely poem, though. Thanks for your comments...
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was splendid Steven. Even better than you described on the phone and I am deeply flattered that I was on your mind and heart enough to inspire you to write this. YOu are such a good friend and a really talented writer. YOu get me.

    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is a great symbolism. ying and yang arent just oposites. The dots represent the fact that in every bit of ying there is yang and every bit of ying is yang. in someones live ther happiness and sadness making the whole. The poem speak to me of balancing emotions,priorities etc.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this piece a lot. keep up the amazingly awesome work. i truly hope to read more by you in the future. keep writing. i know you can go somewhere big with your work.
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem, well written, and I think it's one of the best poems that I have read that was written by you. The flow suits the poem well. It sounds like it's about a friend, or a portrayal of yourself in third person. Keep posting man!
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]

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