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    dots Submission Name: A Smile to Hide the Paindots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Smile to Hide the Paindots
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    Though she's surrounded by many who love her,
    she's alone.
    You can see it in her eyes,
    there's an emptiness in her stare,
    a longing from deep within her soul.
    When she smiles,
    it's so pretend,
    so unreal.
    It's her way of hiding her pain,
    her unhappiness,
    her way of masking the truth from the ones she loves.
    She lives each day in denial,
    suppressing the emotions that she feels,
    hoping they'll just fade away.
    Although she's crying on the inside,
    she'll never shed a tear,
    never let them see her weakness,
    for she feels she must be strong,
    not only for herself,
    but for the ones who love her,
    the only ones who care.




    Submitted on 2006-02-07 13:20:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know if you are refering to Mona Lisa in this write, or writing it genrally. I scrolled up and saw that Mona Lisa picture as your account picture, and not one that you have selected for this poem. I will take it as though this is not about Mona Lisa. Yes, people often appear happy, but if you look deep into their eyes, you can tell how they are actually feeling. People often act differently in public then what they are actually feeling, and you highlighted that point really well. Good job

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like abuse like sandman said... stop the cycle.
    i liked this piece a lot. keep up the amazingly awesome work. i truly hope to read more by you in the future. keep writing. i know you can go somewhere big with your work.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, Mona Lisa's Smile..

    That's what this poem (along with the picture) reminds me of.
    And you have described it well (in my opinion)- a smile to hide the pain.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like all i have read today is the struggles people have with abuse or lost in life and love

    this was emotional and very deep to thought
    well done great read

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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